Electricity is a recent discovery by a guy named Thomas Edison. In this paragraph I'm going to write about 12 things that you can do without using electricity.
Theirs many things you can do without using electricity like for example doing an exercise. This would help your body. Go run outside or go on bike with a friend. You can go to the gym or if you have a pool, go swimming. It would benefit you by making you stronger, healthy and more attractive to girls. hahahahah :):).
Another thing you can do is by making things that would help you to be more intelligent like by reading some books, doing HW, reading magazines. If you do all this, you would have more time to do things you like.
The last example of what you can do is seeing a book with photos of your friends and family to remember the good times. Also you can invite some friends and play a a board game. :):):):):)
Mahonry your comments are really serious, and true. I agree we can do many things without electricity and had the same fun. Maybe for someone else electricity is not necessary or something but we need both of them. We like the things we can used without electricity.
ResponderEliminarI think that the things you mentioned on your paragraph were very true. However, you have a few grammatical errors, and that kind of makes your writing weaker. Apart from the errors, I think that what you say can really make your time funner when you don't have any electricity.
ResponderEliminarThere are some things that you could do when there is no electricity. Nevertheless, all those excersises, they are sports. I think sports is one thing that you could do when there is no electricity. I think you just tried to do this *HW* as you call it very fast. So, I think that you did a bad work and that is the only thing I can say.
ResponderEliminarIn your post you tell us many things that we diond't knew of tsomthing so basic as the electricity. Thomas edision was a geniu and he changed our way to look the world. Thanks to him we can see and have ruinion in full colors wioth people we cate abolut. SLos he seems like somne who cknew it ewould change th world and change us. WIthout electricity we would be like cavemans. W e coulkdbn't have ipods televiions ans other maint hngs in this modeern era.
ResponderEliminarmahonry your essay is too short for the expectatives of Mr picketts. You need a couple more sentences to complete it. Besides being short there are a few spelling mistakes I saw there. A thing I really liked is that you metion a lot of important things for you. You really tryied to make your essay great but I think you needed more time. You could also mention more deatails of the things you will do. Besides this your essay was really well done.
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